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Its come back again because I think it disappeared for long enough..
Now im empty again its time to put it back up, and write more.

I don't know what you're thinking,
I won't relate to you,
You don't know what I'm thinking,
Though you say you do.

Theres only one true person,
Who knows just what i'll do,
I won't let them get away,
Don't worry i'll get you too.

You made me shed the tears,
I never thought I'd shed,
Maybe if you hadn't
I might not be dead.

So yes I slit my wrists,
and yes I cry at night,
Just to be honest,
I wanted to hold you tight.

Safe in your arms,
Hidden out of sight,
The horrible scars you gave me,
Would give you such a fright.

The true nightmares start now,
The way I said they would,
Then you started laughing,
Just the way you should.

Because now you're screaming,
With all the terror and the fear,
Seeing what you've put me through,
I find revenge quite dear.

So you've run away,
Don't tell me you're alone,
You don't know what it's like,
To be in the real dead zone.

Well I won't give up yet,
I'll entice you in my dreams,
and suffer the tears of regret,
Remember nothing is as it seems.

So I may be gone,
I will haunt you yet,
I'll chase you to the ends of the earth,
Until you have repaid your debt.

Siân- Darksmoke101
©2009 ~darksmoke101
:icondarksmoke101:

Author's Comments

Do I need to say anything?
More coming if you like this kind of poetry

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:iconredtailed-hawk:
I really like the general feel of the poem- it seems like people are so excited about the thought of poetry not needing to rhyme that they go out of their way not to rhyme. Not only do you ignore that, you manage to make your rhymes seem meaningful and not forced.

The only con. crit. that I have is that some of your punctuation seems a bit off- I could point out which ones, if it interested you.

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"I'm going to sit on your head until morning, because there's something about you that I don't understand!"

~Gotta love that predator logic!
:icondarksmoke101:
Yes it does interest me (perfectionist xD)

Thankyou, I write things like this in my emo mood.. im a very vengeful little soul (be worried xD)

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late to school on mondays- plotting revenge is fun! (and my job)
Intimidating...
I want Lavi's innocence.. and not just his hammer XP
:icondarksmoke101:
Thankyou!!

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late to school on mondays- plotting revenge is fun! (and my job)
Intimidating...
I want Lavi's innocence.. and not just his hammer XP
:iconsahrajane:
Nyaww Sian =(
It's a beautiful poepm, however sad.
*cuggles*

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There's lots of things I could put here, but I'm not quite lame enough to convey emotions, or to quote lyrics. Jokes are just...no.
Hmm, difficult.

I'll just say hello. Hello! :D
:iconsahrajane:
poem* (nobody saw that) ¬ ¬

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There's lots of things I could put here, but I'm not quite lame enough to convey emotions, or to quote lyrics. Jokes are just...no.
Hmm, difficult.

I'll just say hello. Hello! :D
:icondarksmoke101:
Thankyou!!
I never knew you had dA!!
*cuddles you too*

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late to school on mondays- plotting revenge is fun! (and my job)
Intimidating...
I want Lavi's innocence.. and not just his hammer XP
:iconsahrajane:
=33 Yeah, Looks like we've had it around the same amount of time too xD
xx

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There's lots of things I could put here, but I'm not quite lame enough to convey emotions, or to quote lyrics. Jokes are just...no.
Hmm, difficult.

I'll just say hello. Hello! :D
:icondarksmoke101:
(thankyou for the favourite on music is my life)
I know, and I still cant believe you have it!
Im like
HELL YEAH!!!! ANOTHER dA BUDDY!!!!

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late to school on mondays- plotting revenge is fun! (and my job)
Intimidating...
I want Lavi's innocence.. and not just his hammer XP

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